He loved one thing…

He loved one thing

The smell of onion and garlic

Cooking, leaking out

Of her skin, branding her clothes.

That promise of a meal, ready to turn

With repetitive force.

The comfort of nothingness

Of whole countries debased with

The same roughly chopped onions and garlic

Browning, burning

In that wedding present pan.

 

Apologies for the lack of blog posts. I have been writing, but nothing that I immediately wanted and needed to share. I’ve also been busy organising a writers’ group which is now ten strong. And this is the fruit of one of our exercises on Saturday.

I write some of the exercises myself, and also use a folder of exercises gleaned from Emma Pass but via other writers, including Cathy Grindrod. I believe this exercise is one of Cathy’s: read a poem and discuss, then write a poem based on it, use, for example, ‘He loved three things’ by Anna Akhmatova.

We had an interesting discussion about translation within the group. The version I found online for free had the title ‘He loved three things: alive’. Other members went on to find different translations. It makes me want to read the poem in the original Russian, but I can’t speak or read Russian!

I only had time for one thing, so here it is.

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I've always been a writer one way or the other. You can find out more about copywriter me at www.beckydeans.co.uk
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6 Responses to He loved one thing…

  1. At least you’re back with us now. Looking forward to more. (There will be more, won’t there?)

  2. beckydeans says:

    Hiya Graeme, terribly behind with Christmas stuff but there will be loads and I am researching something big! Hope you are your family have a good one! I will try to make the writers’ conference though need to do some organising!

    • I think we all suffer with Christmas (in spite of my recent posts on the subject that you won’t have had time to read!). At this time of year, and especially with children, that’s what you need to focus on.

      Looking forward to seeing something big (sorry, got a bit “Carry On” there…). Have a great time over Christmas and New Year – and hopefully we’ll see each other before too long.

  3. Looking forward to seeing you. Hope all is well

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